I've decided to share the first kiss I ever wrote, which also happens to be the long-awaited first kiss of high-school sophomore, Emily Wilkins, in Frog Kisses and Fairytale Misses:
As we made it to the car, Brad took the keys from me and put them in his pocket. He leaned on the car then pulled me over to stand in front of him. A minivan beside us offered some privacy. Still, I searched the parking lot for unwanted company. Brad whispered as if fate might hear, “We’re alone.”
“At last,” I said. Angles of light came down around us. Even in the shadows I could see when his easy smile became the look that had taunted me since the fair. He wanted me. A guy I liked wanted to kiss me.
I half-expected some calamity to befall us as his head came down toward mine. After a few tentative kisses, he bent forward and deepened the kiss. By the time our tongues met I was nothing but shot nerve endings and raging hormones.
He stopped and a dreamy, “Wow,” escaped my lips.
His face hovered close to mine. “So, was it worth the wait?”
I smiled. “You have no idea.”
What do you think? Did your first kiss go so well, or would you rewrite it if you could?
Sigh...love the emotion you convey of that swelling in your chest when you realizr... he likes me?! The angst of being young, what a feeling and you made me remember it in this scene. :)
ReplyDeleteWow, what a great first kiss. :D
ReplyDeleteAww, how sweet! And swoon :)
ReplyDeleteA very sweet first kiss!
ReplyDeleteVery nice...I wish my first kiss was as sweet :)
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Oh that was so sweet:) "I half expected some calamity to befall us. . . " that made me laugh out loud! Lovely scene, thank you for sharing!
ReplyDeleteThat was a truly superb, great first kiss scene. Bravo. Roland
ReplyDeleteThat was sweet.
ReplyDeleteAnd my first kiss? I was in second grade. ; )
Awww taht was very sweet (And hawt)! :-0
ReplyDeleteThis is so sweet and cute.
ReplyDeleteSuch a nice first kiss. So wish mine went that way. (I'm definitely in the rewrite camp.)
ReplyDeleteIt would have been nice to have such a great first kiss. And I think my first kiss was playing - boys catch the girls in grade 2. so I'm pretty sure it wasn't like this one.
ReplyDeleteThis made me smile: "I half-expected some calamity to befall us as his head came down toward mine."
ReplyDeletePoor thing, she's obviously been waiting awhile for this kiss, and it sounds as if circumstances have been getting in the way.
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So glad it was worth the wait!
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I second that wow! :)
ReplyDeleteThis was incredible. That last line? Perfect. So many people want their first kiss to be exactly like this, so she's lucky :)
ReplyDeleteHmmm...no re-writes needed on my first kiss. :-)
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Nope mine was pretty darn awesome - course if anyone knew -lol
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